Why did you choose your major？
a.I want to learn how to use money to make money.
b.In Strategic Management Theory class,I can learn how to make
strategies and what strategies is better than others.
c.I like to research why a company can make more profit than other
companies.
d.I want to be a hedge fund manager.
e.I want to know how to evaluate a company's stock price.
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I am glad that you choose your major by lots of good reasons, and you go toward your favorite major.
But maybe you could detail the condition about it. For example did you feel confused about the school you were hard to make decision? I think you briefly described the reasons, but I don't know the process about how you decided it. And the topic sentence is a littel bit strange. ..So that is my opinion.
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There so many reasons make you to choose your major!!
But, after I saw this paragraph, I almost didn't know what is your major?! Let me guess... is it financial management?
I think you have to let the readers know what is your major, and then you can write the details of every reason, or emphasize on two or three important reasons.
And the most important thing is that you have to try to write a paragraph... try to connect all the sentences. Not just write a list of sentences. Go ahead!
A9409002 Betty
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